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Post by rovi297 on Jun 4, 2024 18:42:35 GMT -5
謝人送粽 – (唐)楊巨源
来时三月春犹在,到日端阳节又临。 珍重主人意勤腆,满槃角黍细包金。
A Quatrain by Yang Juyuan (Tang dynasty) (Appreciation for the Gift of Zongzi)
‘Twas the third vernal moon when I was on my way, The Dragon Boat Fest gan as I reached the coast. Afore me, laid Zongzi of millet of the day, I bowed sincerely to my most welcoming host.
Tr. Wangyu 05/06/2024 (to be revised)
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Post by 边 草 on Jun 6, 2024 14:48:10 GMT -5
看得出来,忘语君精雕细琢,千锤百炼,欣赏加佩服! 不懂就问:‘Twas=There was?
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Post by rovi297 on Jun 6, 2024 15:15:45 GMT -5
'Twas 是 it was 的 contraction ...韻腳的選擇往往會影響到譯文的達意與文本的自然表達。我這版沒能處理好。
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Post by 溪山 on Jun 7, 2024 1:00:08 GMT -5
多谢忘语君好诗好译! 赏学了! 祝各位端午快乐! ![:)](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/smiley.png) 虽然原诗平起仄收,首句不入韵, 但忘语君高标准,ABAB 韵。
同意忘语君,韵脚的选择确实令人头痛。 这首小诗我试过几个不同韵脚。 凑合了: 谢人送粽 唐朝 杨巨源 来时三月春犹在,到日端阳节又临。 珍重主人意勤腆,满槃角黍细包金。 Thanks for the Zongzi by Yang Juyuan of Tang Dynasty In March, I set out on a fair spring day, As I arrived, Double Fifth Fest drew near. Golden millet zongzi filled the whole tray, The thoughtfulness of the host I hold dear. Tr. Xishan “角黍包金”,做成牛角状的粽子,包裹着金灿灿的黍米
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Post by rovi297 on Jul 9, 2024 20:34:28 GMT -5
溪山君譯得非常漂亮!點贊!獻花!上茶!
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Post by 溪山 on Jul 13, 2024 11:35:54 GMT -5
忘语君过奖了。 多谢鼓励!
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