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Post by rovi297 on Sept 17, 2022 1:42:42 GMT -5
絕句 – （宋）陳師道 書當快意讀易盡， 客有可人期不來。 世事相違每如此， 好懷百歲幾回開？ A Quatrain by Chen Shidao When you’re absorbed in a book, but soon the book ends, So hard to come by, though I pray I'd meet chums more. The whole world behaves as such without exception, Likewise, how often with guffawing could we roar? Tr. Wangyu
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Post by 溪山 on Sept 17, 2022 12:46:40 GMT -5
賞讀忘語君美譯！ 非常忠實原詩。  湊興： 絕句 – （宋）陳師道 書當快意讀易盡， 客有可人期不來。 世事相違每如此， 好懷百歲幾回開。 Jueju by Chen Shi-dao of Song Dynasty Engrossing books rush you too soon to the last page Your huckleberry friends visit in a dog's age Always like this you never get what you wish for How often in life do you in laughter engage Tr. Xishan |
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Post by 边 草 on Sept 18, 2022 5:09:03 GMT -5
观棋不语真君子， 留言带刺大丈夫。  读二位的翻译常让我会意一笑。但是只看不发言非君子所为，所以今天斗胆置评。 忘语君翻译的差不多都是一些冷僻的诗词，既然是起兴者，所以就有很大的随意性，这是优势。而溪山君往往处于跟者的位置，内容由不得她选择，似乎有点被动，但却有踩在巨人肩膀上的嫌疑。我觉得这种态势应该有所改变。下面是王昌龄的绝句，词语通俗、内意平白，是我比较喜欢的唐诗，读时心里也常常在想用英语怎么表达。所以既想请二位高人拨冗指教一番，也不乏有过一把裁判的瘾的意思。 寒雨连江夜入吴，平明送客楚山孤。 洛阳亲友如相问，一片冰心在玉壶。 在下谢先！:-) |
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Post by rovi297 on Sept 18, 2022 5:09:32 GMT -5
改良版
絕句 – （宋）陳師道
書當快意讀易盡，
客有可人期不來。
世事相違每如此，
好懷百歲幾回開？
A Quatrain by Chen Shidao
You just bask in a good book, but the book soon ends,
So hard to come by chums, though I pray I'd meet more.
The whole world does behave just like this without fail,
Likewise, how oft carefree with laughter could we roar?
Tr. Wangyu
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Post by rovi297 on Sept 18, 2022 5:10:57 GMT -5
賞讀忘語君美譯！ 非常忠實原詩。 湊興： 絕句 – （宋）陳師道 書當快意讀易盡， 客有可人期不來。 世事相違每如此， 好懷百歲幾回開。 Jueju by Chen Shi-dao of Song Dynasty Engrossing books rush you too soon to the last page Your huckleberry friends visit in a dog's age Always like this you never get what you wish for How often in life do you in laughter engage Tr. Xishan Your huckleberry friends visit in a dog's age -----beautiful indeed... |
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Post by rovi297 on Sept 18, 2022 5:14:42 GMT -5
观棋不语真君子， 留言带刺大丈夫。 读二位的翻译常让我会意一笑。但是只看不发言非君子所为，所以今天斗胆置评。 忘语君翻译的差不多都是一些冷僻的诗词，既然是起兴者，所以就有很大的随意性，这是优势。而溪山君往往处于跟者的位置，内容由不得她选择，似乎有点被动，但却有踩在巨人肩膀上的嫌疑。我觉得这种态势应该有所改变。下面是王昌龄的绝句，词语通俗、内意平白，是我比较喜欢的唐诗，读时心里也常常在想用英语怎么表达。所以既想请二位高人拨冗指教一番，也不乏有过一把裁判的瘾的意思。 寒雨连江夜入吴，平明送客楚山孤。 洛阳亲友如相问，一片冰心在玉壶。 在下谢先！:-) 這首詩最難處理好的一句，個人認為，就是 “一片冰心在玉壶”... |
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Post by 溪山 on Sept 18, 2022 12:32:22 GMT -5
邊君說得不錯，忘語君詞量超大，譯起來得心應手。 忘語君對翻譯非常 passionate，譯文講究。我就是湊熱鬧而已。  陽光君字超好，我只能讚，湊不上熱鬧呀。 |
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Post by 溪山 on Sept 18, 2022 12:33:35 GMT -5
這首詩最難處理好的一句，個人認為，就是 “一片冰心在玉壶”... －－－ 多謝忘語君提示。 |
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Post by 溪山 on Sept 18, 2022 13:34:54 GMT -5
改良版 絕句 – （宋）陳師道 書當快意讀易盡， 客有可人期不來。 世事相違每如此， 好懷百歲幾回開？ A Quatrain by Chen Shidao You just bask in a good book, but the book soon ends, So hard to come by chums, though I pray I'd meet more. The whole world does behave just like this without fail, Likewise, how oft carefree with laughter could we roar? Tr. Wangyu 忘語君真是精益求精！ "You just bask in a good book, but the book soon ends," －－－ "just", "but" 妙！ |
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